Rate this poem please! be brutal as u want?

the first verse is great, nicely worded i can sorta see sumfin there, but after that the second i think u have stuffed up the end of the second verse, the 'pick up kanack' bit the swearing needs to be there because ur talking about urself and u sem to be trying to put across that ur a dumbass with women and u always say the wrong thing, don't worry to much about the other comments i guess this is ur first time asking for advice so my advice if a peom looks alright short u dont need to improve it to try n fit with other peoples opinions just be yourself and enjoy it.